Writing Samples

Editing Samples

I have been given permission by my clients to post the following samples. The "original" version is the text that I received from a client. "Final showing edits" is the completed edit with my changes revealed in MS Word markup mode, and "final" refers to the completed edit with the markup hidden.

1) Toast Master's Speech on the Japanese  Bicycle Industry

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This  is a presentation   composed as a Toastmaster's assignment by one of my ESL/accent reduction students, a visiting scholar at U. C. Berkeley's Haas School of  Business.  Toastmasters is an international organization dedicated to improving people's oral presentation skills with   dozens of  chapters in  the San Francisco Bay area, and I encourage membership in this organization to all interested students. It provides  great opportunities for both native speakers and ESL students to improve their public speaking and, especially, their spoken English.


As an undergraduate, I studied Greek, Latin, Old English, Middle English and German and received a degree in Classics Summa cum Laude. I earned a PhD in Comparative Literature at U. C. Berkeley, and I taught English there for 5 years as a GSI (Graduate Student Instructor.) I was awarded the university’s Outstanding GSI Award, and on the strength of my teaching, I was an adjunct professor there for three years after receiving my PhD. As an adjunct professor, I taught writing, literature, philosophy, mythology, Greek drama, and Latin in the Departments of Rhetoric, Comparative Literature, and Classics.

I have also taught at an ESL school in downtown Berkeley and served as an English and writing tutor to students of all levels, from junior and senior high school, through undergraduate and graduate students, to professionals including businesspeople, lawyers, psychologists, engineers, physicists, PhDs, and visiting Cal professors.

I have worked as a professional editor, speaking and presentation coach, copywriter, grant writer, web site content provider, and general manager for a dot-com specializing in literacy issues. Additionally, I worked for Educational Testing Services (ETS) for seven years scoring GMAT, TOEFL, and GRE essays and in test development.